Need help writing an obituary. NEED HELP! Updated!! Do I need all those commas?? #14

[FinallyBoughtDVC]

long time companion or just companion

or

Mr.X is preceded in death by his wife Mrs. X but is survived by daughter Jenny, son James, and longtime friend Jezzebelle

LOL - Jezzebelle?!!! OMG - you made me spit water out!

 

[HelenePA]

LOL - Jezzebelle?!!! OMG - you made me spit water out!

I've called her worse over the last few days

 

[FinallyBoughtDVC]

SMITH - Kenneth, of ANYTOWN on January 14, 2009. Devoted father of Tom, Kimberly, Brian. Kenneth was also survived by 3 grandchildren Ali, Leah and Aidan. Beloved brother of Donald and Charles. Predeceased by his caring and devoted wife of 27 years, Jane. Loving Companion of Jezabel Wanttoseemynameinthepaper. He selflessly donated his body to science for the betterment of man. In lieu of flowers donations to the Let's Do Good Foundation may be made in his memory. A memorial dinner is planned for a later date.


I copied the above from my neighbor's who recently passed away. It was a similar situation. I changed names and circumstances somewhat. I hope this helps.

 

[FinallyBoughtDVC]

Also, you could add the spouses to the obit. I can help you with grammar & punctuation once you get all the names where you want them to be.

 

[FinallyBoughtDVC]

OMG - my brain is not working. I just re-read what I wrote.

Your mom should be listed first. My neighbor was divorced, so he wasnt predeceased. So, it should read, predeceased by, then you kids, then the grandchildren, then his sibling, then Jezzywoman, then the facts.

It should go like this:

SMITH - Kenneth, of ANYTOWN on January 14, 2009. Predeceased by his caring and devoted wife of 27 years, Jane. Devoted father of Tom, Kimberly, Brian. Kenneth was also survived by 3 grandchildren Ali, Leah and Aidan. Beloved brother of Donald and Charles. Loving Companion of Jezabel Wanttoseemynameinthepaper. Kenneth selflessly donated his body to science for the betterment of man. In lieu of flowers donations to the Let's Do Good Foundation may be made in his memory. A memorial dinner is planned for a later date.

I need coffee.

 

[HelenePA]

I'm gonna call her Jezzebelle from now on! We've been calling the body donor people the body snatchers. Seriously my family (except for ONE of my dad's sisters and jezzebelle) has a really WERID sense of humor... at my pop's funeral we had most of the family laughing during the mass... my pop was the same way.. We just hate to be sad we are a "better to laugh than cry" family I guess... Hell at my mom's funeral my dad announced my pregnancy with my son! It was all smiles and congrats hardly any crying... I'm renting a bounce house for his "party" I was thinking of getting fireworks too... We LOOOOOOVVEEEE fireworks in our family! I wanted to wait 45 days til I get him back and have a welcome home party but his one sister was REALLY against that idea... Personally I think he would have loved it! I'm gonna miss his smile and laugh the most...

 

[Disney Doll]

How about this?

Charles "Charlie" LN ,57, of WH and formerly of TR, died suddenly late Wednesday night. He was born in MC on January 28, 1951 and was the son of the late Charles and Helen (maiden) Last Name. He was also predeceased by his wife of 27 years, Christine (maiden) Last name.
He was employed at IRM. He was of the Catholic faith.
Survivors include a daughter Helene LN of town, a son Robert LN of town, a sister DH of town, a brother RP of town, and a sister LD of Orgiwigsburg. He is also survived by 3 grandchildren Abby LN, Allison LN, Aidan Last Name, his cherished companion DC, and numerous aunts, uncles, nieces and nephews.
A memorial dinner party will be held in his honor June 21at 2pm at the TR Firehouse...

You don't need to put he was predeceased in death by his wife...predeceased is enough of an explanation. The "in death" part sounds sort of redundant.

For the memorial...do you want to say it's a dinner party or do you just want to say it's a memorial service or maybe a memorial gathering??? What if you decide not have it be a dinner?? If it's really just going to be a group of people getting together to remember him with no formal service, then I think I'd probably call it a memorial gathering. Let people be happily surprised when they get there and you are serving food.

 

[Disney Doll]

eh its pretty common knowledge that I'm not married... its not for lack of trying.. any time we plan a wedding I get pregnant or someone dies its an omen I tell you... My grandmother was supposed to go to disney with us last year and we were going to get married quickly down there... she died 2 months before we left.. my dad was going to go to disney with us.. again gonna try to get married quickly.. he dies... no one is invited to disney with us anymore!! Unless they have some kind of sick death wish

Note to self...don't go to Disney with HelenePA.

 

[Cindy B]

Also, you could add the spouses to the obit. I can help you with grammar & punctuation once you get all the names where you want them to be.

They did not add spouses when my father in law just passed. Me and the other spouse was not added because we were not direct "bloodline" to the deceased.

 

[froglady]

They did not add spouses when my father in law just passed. Me and the other spouse was not added because we were not direct "bloodline" to the deceased.

Spouses do not have to be listed, but it is a nice gesture, and makes it easier for others. It is SOP in my newspaper.

Quite frankly, my SIL was as much of a daughter to my mother as I was, and it would have hurt her to not be mentioned. The same goes for DH.

 

[FinallyBoughtDVC]

Spouses do not have to be listed, but it is a nice gesture, and makes it easier for others. It is SOP in my newspaper.

Quite frankly, my SIL was as much of a daughter to my mother as I was, and it would have hurt her to not be mentioned. The same goes for DH.

I agree. I love my SIL so much, I couldn't even begin to imagine leaving her out. She works with my parents and spends more time with them than I do - heck, she should get top billing just for putting up with my dad. LOL.

My mother took care of my father's mother better than any of her daughters ever did. I really think it depends on the circumstances. It is helpful when inlaws are listed. I knew my neighbor's mother passed away because they included her husband's name in the obituary. Otherwise, I may not have realized it was her mother because the last name was different.

I think it depends on the family. Also, Helen, if you decide to include that he was of the Catholic faith, remember to capitalize Catholic.