the writer revange

[jackyoung winner]

it's a part of a story i wrote i hope you like it

The boarding school.
Servant: Madam Mary…..she does it again….she does it again….she put mice in the kitchen.
Principal in her office with Sam: Sam…what I can do to stop that behaviour….what else I can do to stop you.
I'm sorry…says Sam
Stop saying that Sam it's the hundred time that you apologizing…you don't leave me a choice you will work with Camela in cleaning. Sam opening her eyes
No…not with Camela….her voice is not beautiful and listening to her for two weeks will make me crazy.
So in this cause you will know how I feel when I have someone like you in the school….it will be a good lesson for you.
God help me…says Sam
So from that day Sam have a nightmare in both morning and evening. One day when Camela's is singing …
Would you mind to stop so I can do my work well…says Sam
But Camela doesn't listen to Sam and she keeps singing…
Don't you know anything else than singing…says Sam
Yes…I can tell story….and a good one….says Camela
Finally something interesting in this job…says Sam
The story is about a famous tennis player….says Camela
A tennis player…says Sam
Yeah…and name is Mage Owen…Mage was a great tennis player and she wins many cups and championship…but when her mother died she stopped playing…so all the TVs and Radios were wondering what could happened to her….and in her next interview she said
I played tennis because my family force me and it was my mother's dream…and now I'm going to leave sport and do the thing that I always want…said Mage
So what is your dream?....asked interviewer
My dream was and still to become a writer and I start writing a story…said Mage
So everyone was excited about Mage's book and the newspaper and TV were talking about it but Mage wasn't a good writer as she good at sport…said Camela
And what happened then Camela….says Sam
So she wrote an advertisement saying that she will give everyone who read her book a thing from her…and you know any famous people things cost fortune…says Camela
Yeah…you right…say Sam
So let me complete…in the end of the book they will find a name of the dolls that belong to them and then they should buy it from the shop…after that they should take the thing that is in the dolls body.
Wow…interesting…says Sam
Waite…Know is the interesting part of the story…says Camela
Come on…says Sam
All the people bought her books and they got their praises, but after two weeks she lost everything….says Camela
Everything…says Sam
Yeah everything and that happened when the number of the broken dolls filled the rubbish so that the government complain and the parents complained also because they thought it was a bad thing for their children mind and they stopped her….then all the people heated her and thought her things and also they called her the dolls killer……says Camela

i hope you like it and i'm waiting for your comments

 

[jackyoung winner]

easy with me pale i'm arabian which it mean my english is weak not like yours however i will complete my story


A dolls killer…but why she put the thing inside the dolls…says Sam
She put Zip in the back of the doll so they can open it easy…but you know the peoples and their ways….says Camela
Yeah…you right…did you buy one…says Sam
Yeah…I bought one and their doll but my mother didn't let me to open it and also didn't let me to thought it because since all the people heated her and through her things…she start bothering people like she was sending a dog to one of the families to broke everything's in their house and then he left the house without hearting anybody….says Camela
They deserve it but it's too much I think….say Sam
I can't really tell you my opinion about this story…I will go now…says Camela
Camela can I see the doll that you bought…no don't think that want to take it….I just want to see it…says Sam
Come with me…says Camela
Camela take Sam to her room and shows Sam the doll which was in a box under the bed.
Its beautiful doll…I feel sorry to know that they were cutting and throwing it in the bin like rubbish….says Sam
Yeah…it's time to go….I will be waiting you tomorrow Sam…says Camela
At night Sam wake up because of a voice coming from the garden…so Sam look from the window to see what is happening and then she saw a woman was digging…Sam go down quickly and come closer to the woman at the first time she thought it's Camela but since she look to her she see a different woman…she was dirty and look very scary…Sam run as quickly as she can but the woman hit her in the back of her head by shovel and then Sam fell down. In the morning San wake up and she is still in the garden.
Oh…my head…the woman…says Sam
She find a shovel near to her and a broken doll with a small tamp she become yellow from what she see but when she turn she see the principal and Camela are coming to her.
What happened….explain everything…says principal
I don't know….says Sam
What do you mean by you don't know….. Says principal
Camela see the broken doll and she become sad.
Camela wait….I swear I didn't…says Sam
Everything is clear….that's why you wanted to see it…to take it from me….says Camela
I told you I didn't do it….last night it there was a woman who was digging in the garden I thought it was you so that I go to her but then I figure out that she wasn't you I tried to run but she hit me and I fell down…says Sam
A good story Sam…but did you think for a moment that we would believe you…the answer is No of course…says principal
Look I lies a lot before but this time I'm saying the truth…please trust me….says Sam
You will be punished for two days….alone in the roof room so you can think more about your behaviour…says principal
No…no Camela trust me….says Sam
If you are saying the truth so why you are wearing Mage's clove….says Camela
Sam shocked when she sees the clove.
I don't know where it comes from…says Sam
Stop…Sam and come with me NOW….says principal

i hope this is better than the first draft

 

[jackyoung winner]

thank you every body for your supporting and i will complete....


The principal take Sam and put her in the roof room for two days.
All that's happened because of that woman….and this clave….says Sam angry
She tries to open it but it seems to be stock on her arm.
Dame…what this rubbish…..says Sam angry
Two days later Sam gets out from the roof room. In the mathematic class Sam is writing in her notebook then her right arm which is the clave were start moving and pointing out side the class.
What are you doing Sam…says math teacher
A…a…nothing…I...just thought I know the answer…says Sam while she holding her right arm.
Sam tries to hold her hand but the hand still pointing and then all the class start laughing on the teacher because they are thinking that Sam is joking with the teacher.
Will you stop or I will send you to the principal…says the teacher
Then the hand through all the books in the Sam's table.
Stop…Sam…says the teacher
I can't…it's out of control…says Sam
Will you stop or I will hit you in your arm…says the teacher
No. I will try…says Sam
But her hand doesn't stop so that the math teacher takes her ruler and hit Sam's arm.
Ouch…says Sam
Then Sam's hand slap the teacher…and then all the student stop laughing.
GO TO THE PRINCIPAL NOW…says the teacher angry
Sam goes to the principal office and then.
What did you do now…says principal
I didn't do it…it was my hand…says Sam
What….and what did your hand do….says principal laughing
My hand slap the math teacher…Says Sam
What…and you saying it easy….says principal
I told you I didn't do it…says Sam
Then her hand starts massing the principal table.
Stop it….Sam….says principal
I'm trying….says Sam
Stop it Sam…I mean it…says principal
Then the hand stops in Camela's name.
GO TO YOUR ROOM NOW….says principal
Sam goes to her room. After three hours the principal comes to Sam room and take her to the doctor office.
This is doctor Alex Anderson she is a Schick…and Doctor Alex this is Sam your patient…says principal
Hi Sam…how are you…says Alex
I don't know…really…says Sam
That's way I bring her…to help you getting better Sam…and now I will leave you both of you to talk….says principal
Take a sit Sam and tell me about your family…Says Alex
What I thought you will ask me about what happened…says Sam
Ok then…what happened…says Alex
Then Sam told her what happened to her that night and what happened with the math teacher.
I don't know why they don't trust me…says Sam
Because nobody believe this story Sam even a child…says Alex

 

[jackyoung winner]

thank you sea star and tine for you supporting and i will complete....


Why…why not…she even hit me in my head…says Sam
What…can I see…says Alex
Alex fined a sprain in Sam's hand.
Yeah…there is a sprain in your head…says Alex
You see…I told you I was saying the truth…says Sam happy
Sam it's not a proof…it can be happened by anything…look I think this accident effect your mind…says Alex
You are saying that I'm mad…I had enough…says Sam
Sam leaves the office and when she is going to her room the hand start pointing but Sam ignore it then the hand hold the wall and refused to let Sam to go to her room.
Ok…where do you want to me to go…..says Sam
Then the hand pointed to Camela's room.
What this Camela's room I will not go….I don't want Camela to think that I'm thief ….says Sam
But the hand still pointing….then Sam inter Camela's room and the hand point to the bed…when Sam was walking near to Camela's bed Camela arrive.
What are you doing her...did you forget to steal something else…says Camela
Why you can't believe me Camela I'm your friend remember….says Sam
Friends never petered their friends….you don't know how it was important to me…says Camela crying
it was the only gift I got from my mother and the only gift I had….and you took it because you are a curies person who like to bather everyone…why Sam Why….says Camela crying
I swear I didn't…says Sam
Just go…says Camela
Sam leaves the room quickly and goes to her room and she planned to stay late to observe the garden from her room's window so she can catch the woman and proof her innocent…she stay late for three nights but nothing happened….in addition all the student are ignoring Sam and avoiding to talk or sit with her.
The principal send Sam back to the doctor office.
I hope this conversation will not end like the last time…says Alex
I hope so…says Sam
According to what you said to me before…I bring things that was with you on that day and also I research about the story that Camela's told you…and I know that you should buy the book first then you can get yours own doll…and the doll that we found it with you her name is Lily….says Alex
What…can I have a look…says Sam
Sam looks to the back of the doll's head and she finds name Lily.
So that means…says Sam
It's mean what….says Alex
Sam runs to the Camela's room.
Stop Sam….I don't finish yet….why she always doing that to me…says Alex
Sam goes to Camela's room and she finds Camela in the room.
Sam what are you doing here…didn't you learn from the last time…says Camela
Your doll is still under the bed…says Sam
What are saying Sam….says Camela?
I'm telling you that the doll that you found it with me on that day…it was another doll your doll is still here in it place under the bed…says Sam
And…how do you know that…says Camela