I would take Marionnette's suggestion of keeping it shorter to heart. You go thru about half of the video talking about your plans before you even go to the site. That's great that you love talking about your trip, but this video isn't about that, it's about "Disney World Vacation Account Info". An informational video should be immediately to the point: Opening statement, supporting sentences, then go into a few sentences of detail on each talking point. It should also be around 2-4 minutes. DVA: What is it? A service offered by Disney to help you save your money for a Disney vacation. Why is it useful? It's a way to help you save your money first, instead of only saving what you have left over. Why should you use this over another savings account? Emotional connection to the money being earmarked for Disney... 2% bonus on the redeemed amount after 120 days... easy consolidation of gift cards... I didn't walk away from this video thinking I learned or was intrigued by the DVA, just that you made a video to share your excitement about your trip. It was hard to watch to the end, and hardly anyone will watch this from start to finish. The internet way is to view for 20 seconds, and see if it captures your interest. If not, close out. Maybe if you're lucky they'll skip ahead a minute and see. Skip ahead to the middle, then the end. Even the intro (which you take too long to get to) you say you're going to talk about... My Savings Plan. This should be I'm going to talk about the Disney Vacation Account, which you'll find at disney vacation account dot com -- here's the site, let's jump right in. Maybe add some of your anecdotes (briefly!) later on when you need filler time but only after you've captured the viewer with actual content. Also, don't discredit your own video (take what I say with a grain of salt!) What's the point of watching an info video where the person talking says to take the entire video with a grain of salt? Nice effort, but lots of room for improvement.