Please help up proofread this essay. My daughter has attilla the hun for an English teacher and every point is going to count. I have included her essay if you could see if you can see any spelling, grammer, content, ect errors!
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This essay is a ending to the story THE BIRDS.
As Nat smoked his last cigarette and watched his empty pack burn. He hoped that for tonight, just for tonight, that he and his family would be safe from the awful birds. When Nat put out his last cigarette he looked at his wife who was sound asleep along with the kids. He knew he had to stay awake and watch over his family. Even though he knew the house was secure from the birds he had to keep an eye on everything. Nats night passed very slowly but as the sun rose, there was still no sign of the birds.
Early that morning as Nats family awoke; he told his wife that he needed to go into town for more supplies. Nat made sure everything would be safe for his family to be alone, and headed off to town. Nat approached town and everything seemed to be going well. He went to the store and got the supplies he needed. He stopped to talk with a few friends he saw along the way. He said good bye to the people he was talking to because he knew he should not keep his family from waiting any longer. When Nat got home his family was safe and sound and very happy to see him. Nat took the kids outside for a few hours; however, he knew he needed to be back inside before dusk, in case the birds would return. When Nat and the kids returned inside, Nat made sure the house was locked up securely, and then he started a fire.
Nat and his family sat in the kitchen eating dinner, both were anxiously listening for the arrival of the birds. Every noise made the parents jump, yet every noise was not the birds. There were no signs of the birds. After dinner, Nat and his family laid by the fire. They sang songs and told stories until the children fell asleep. Nat added more wood to the fire. He still was cautious to keep the fire burning. Nat watched closely as his family slept peacefully. It was still very quiet in the cabin, and most importantly outside the cabin. Nat felt hopefully, maybe the birds have moved south he thought. He watched his family sleep and soon fell asleep himself. He was exhausted and needed sleep, and the quiet of the night made it possible for Nat to sleep.
Nat awoke abruptly and quickly checked his watch. It was morning. Nat had sleep through the night and everything seemed to be alright. Nat walked slowly outside. He looked up in the bright sunlight and saw nothing but the beautiful sky. It was then, that Nat realized the birds were gone. He and his family were safe at last!
Thank you!!!!!
This essay is a ending to the story THE BIRDS.
As Nat smoked his last cigarette and watched his empty pack burn. He hoped that for tonight, just for tonight, that he and his family would be safe from the awful birds. When Nat put out his last cigarette he looked at his wife who was sound asleep along with the kids. He knew he had to stay awake and watch over his family. Even though he knew the house was secure from the birds he had to keep an eye on everything. Nats night passed very slowly but as the sun rose, there was still no sign of the birds.
Early that morning as Nats family awoke; he told his wife that he needed to go into town for more supplies. Nat made sure everything would be safe for his family to be alone, and headed off to town. Nat approached town and everything seemed to be going well. He went to the store and got the supplies he needed. He stopped to talk with a few friends he saw along the way. He said good bye to the people he was talking to because he knew he should not keep his family from waiting any longer. When Nat got home his family was safe and sound and very happy to see him. Nat took the kids outside for a few hours; however, he knew he needed to be back inside before dusk, in case the birds would return. When Nat and the kids returned inside, Nat made sure the house was locked up securely, and then he started a fire.
Nat and his family sat in the kitchen eating dinner, both were anxiously listening for the arrival of the birds. Every noise made the parents jump, yet every noise was not the birds. There were no signs of the birds. After dinner, Nat and his family laid by the fire. They sang songs and told stories until the children fell asleep. Nat added more wood to the fire. He still was cautious to keep the fire burning. Nat watched closely as his family slept peacefully. It was still very quiet in the cabin, and most importantly outside the cabin. Nat felt hopefully, maybe the birds have moved south he thought. He watched his family sleep and soon fell asleep himself. He was exhausted and needed sleep, and the quiet of the night made it possible for Nat to sleep.
Nat awoke abruptly and quickly checked his watch. It was morning. Nat had sleep through the night and everything seemed to be alright. Nat walked slowly outside. He looked up in the bright sunlight and saw nothing but the beautiful sky. It was then, that Nat realized the birds were gone. He and his family were safe at last!
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