Twas the Magic Before Christmas

[coolkidhann95]

Twas the night before christmas and coodisneyfan in vmk was sleeping while infernos danced in her head she woke with a bash a shutter and a room full of smoke she screamed " Please dont be a ravn bc i hate birds!" she rubbed her eyes and found out it was yavn! she looked where he hit and the hit made a giant pit! she looked down there and she saw yavn flying through the air! He went up to her and said with a brr " oh disney i was going to give presents to all the good children in vmk but sadly im badly hurt" then disney said let me do it you could give me your magic santa shirt and I'll be on my way! immeditly she saw a trade request from yavn he gave her the shirt and she mended his hurts and then she got into the sleigh
Go Red Go Bingo Go Eagle Go Hula Go Mocha and Nimue! she was on her way and began to give presents to all the vmkers Flying Carpet Magic for Stitch Inferno for Dude Inferno for Nano Pirate Well for Pirate and Vast and what? she looks in her bag all that was left was Inferno and a Red Football suit it was labeled Thanks Disney for all your help she was so happy she screamed " Merry Christmas to All and To All A Good Night!!"

btw please dont take this the wrong way i worked really hard on this

 

[birdman94]

is this true or just a cute little story becuase it is way cute

 

[shadow pirate]

This was modeled after "The Night Before Christmas" correct?

Some of the ryhming was off . Hard for me to get into. But it was pretty decent. Could use with a spell check, and some ryhme scheme revision.

And how can you hate a raven?

Please don't take my criticism as me despising this or being evil or something, as it's my way of saying that it was pretty good. Although it gets pretty confusing, and most people believe that I contradict myself on many an occasion. Except for some rare cases. But yea, this was pretty good.

 

[coolkidhann95]

ok..
Ty and yes it modeled after the night before christmas
and the raven thing i could not find anything that rymed with yavn
and update on my search for the football suit I got my blue suit but no shoes and im still very happy
trust me great fun when people ask if im taken and then i say im girl
no i dont do taken i just like to make fun of it