Story: The Three Hour Lock Down

[DisIvyCo]

BAM! the door shuts as HOST_Hula comes walking in to a bright lit up room. "The players dont like the new furniture" she says sitting down.
“Well” said yavn ‘we just relised them and they are only getting use to them”
“But we only have two more weeks tell christmas” VMK_Lily says as she sits down on the new and inproved white rocket set.
She has a point and all of these players are waiting for a big supruse to come up said yavn in a not sure voice.
As the staff talked all of the new things that were coming out some thing was happening in centarl plaza. Even know that VMK was closed for about 3 hours. It was some thing strang, It was a person who was not kick out of the game.
“YES! YES!” Said Disneyfan411 dancing around “Finlly the hole game to my self” But little did she know she was not alone in that Game. There was someone not just anyone but a someone.



This is my first story and there is more to come. I hope you like it.

 

[DisIvyCo]

Oh great not another staff meeting, now what” said Vmk_Nimue coming in as if he was mad at the world.
“VMK_Nimue what happened to you wake up worng” said HOST_Hula
"Very funny I just don’t like so many meeting is two days" said he said sitting down.
“Well since we are all here and acounted for lets start” said yavn standing up.
At the other end of the park Disneyfan411 was still danceing untill she saw someone in the shadow
“wh-wh-who are you” she said in a scared voice “What do you want from me” she scrammed
“I just wanted to say Hi” the dark shadow said in a high voice.
“Well you should not be here” said Disneyfan411 and she ran away.


here is the second part.

 

[DisIvyCo]

Bump!!

 

[birdman94]

more!!!!

 

[PurpleDucky]

BAM! the door shuts as HOST_Hula comes walking in to a bright lit up room. "The players dont like the new furniture" she says sitting down.
“Well” said yavn ‘we just REALIZED them and they are only getting use to them”
“But we only have two more weeks TILL christmas” VMK_Lily says as she sits down on the new and IMPROVED white rocket set.
She has a point and all of these players are waiting for a big SURPRISE to come up said yavn in a not sure voice.
As the staff talked all of the new things that were coming out some thing was happening in CENTRAL plaza. Even know that VMK was closed for about 3 hours. It was some thing strang, It was a person who was not kickED out of the game.
“YES! YES!” Said Disneyfan411 dancing around “FinAlly the hole game to my self” But little did she know she was not alone in that Game. There was someone not just anyone but a someone.



This is my first story and there is more to come. I hope you like it.

I'm not an english teacher or anything but I just want to fix your spelling mistakes they will be in caps so you know for furture reference

 

[PurpleDucky]

Your story sounds similar to the Kingdom Keeper story, just kind of like the beginning


A boy is sleeping and he wakes up in WDW and he is the only one in the park and is standing by the walt and mickey statue. Then a mysterious man comes to him....good story you should read it

 

[shadow pirate]

It was kind of hard to for me to really get into the story. It was a little confusing, and the imagery really relied on one's knowledge of VMK and imagination, which could potentially lead to varying interpretations of the story. All in all, considering it is your first story, it's a nice start.

 

[dancegrl1093]

good story so far......... we had a three hour lockdown for real in school once. apparently some kid ran off school grounds because he was going to move for like the fifth time in his life, and he didn't want to leave. anyways, we all played games in the computer lab because we were working on the school paper there, and meanwhile my class had chips while they were waiting for any news. and the announcments were like, "please look in your closets and call the main office if you find something suspicious"......... sorry to get off track, but that's what i thought of when i heard your story title. again, great story, and i can't wait for more!

 

[jasonpwns]

Nimue is a girl

 

[milkabum]

Tip: It would help to write it in Microsoft word because it automatically corrects grammar, punctuation, or spelling mistakes. Then just paste it into your post. By the way, you need commas and punctuation for most of your quotes. Good luck writing!