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We were assigned in Social Studies to write a letter to someone who could help Darfur informing them about this. I wrote to Oprah, saying:

Dear Oprah,
When you wake up every day, and you look at yourself in the mirror, do you know whom you represent? Do you represent yourself? Or maybe your family and friends? Or your lifestyle? Partially. But the majority of you is representing America. Now you’re probably saying, “What’s wrong with representing the USA?” Well take a good look around you. How economically held together we are. Then take a good look at Africa, specifically Darfur. As we bathe in our luxury and comfort, at this very second, someone in Darfur is afraid to go to sleep. Afraid to leave their house. Afraid they’re going to starve to death. Afraid that they will get raped, abused, bombed. And this brings me to my point: Why haven’t we helped out?
Miss Winfrey, there is only one logical answer to this: We are extremely greedy. We eat in excess until our stomachs cannot bear any more food. We use more water then necessary. We use only the best materials for our clothes, bedding, and houses. Meanwhile, we look at a place like Darfur. Food is scarce, water is limited, women are abused, people are being bombed, and life everyday is a challenge in itself. They look at life as one less day until your death. Now I ask you, Miss Winfrey, is this what we want? Is this what we, as Americans, would like to represent?
Now here is the reason I write to you, Oprah. We can change our ways. We can send supplies over to Darfur. We can help them out. We can beat this horrible genocide. We can put our foot down and say, “You know what? This whole genocide thing? Yeah, I’m not really cool with it. Never again.” And that is my goal. Those people out there have courage. They have hope and dreams of a new life; a fresh start. They, after all we have done, believe in us. And for the past few years, we’ve basically given them the cold shoulder; turned our backs on them. But there is one man I would like to give my thanks to, and that man is Brian Steidle. He is probably the first man to go to Darfur, take all the pictures that he has, come back to the USA, tell everyone, “Hey, this is what’s going on and we need to stop it.”
Not only did he get the cold shoulder, he got people telling him there was nothing wrong. And that man had the guts to go back to Darfur and help out. And let me inform you, when he landed that helicopter, the people of Darfur clapped. They didn’t clap because he was this famous guy who would autograph their little of clothes they had. They clapped because they thought that behind Brian were the military and the army and the navy. They thought the USA was finally helping. But all he had was his camera and a few essential things. And he felt guilty. But I think he isn’t the one that should feel guilty. It’s the rest of the world. Everyone, every single country, has turned their backs. They shut Darfur out. And there are children, Oprah. Children dying every day because they have been neglected. Once again I ask, but not to you; to the world. Is this what we want Darfur to see of us? There are ways to pitch in. We can bring food to their tables, and shelter above their heads. We can be the better example. We can save Darfur.
Go to www.savedarfur.com and click on “donate”. Donate money, supplies. Anything we can to pitch in. If possible, I can write a speech and send it in to you to say on your show. My point is we can make a difference. We just need to gather the right amount of voices to shout it with. We need to scream it as far as we can. We can spread the word that they need help.
My point is simple; my word is clear. In the words of Brian Steidle, “I don’t ever want to come to another meeting for genocide ever again.” I hope that those words can influence the population to change their thoughts on Darfur.
My name is Michelle, I am an 8th grader, and I am a believer.


Thank you for your time.


Sincerely,

Michelle (:

Sound good?
 
Good, but the United States is not a monster like you made us out to be.

:) I'm glad you care.
 
That's really good! There's this club at school and we help raise awareness for all different kind of reasons. I'm glad to see someone else helping out a cause!

Way too go!
 
We were assigned in Social Studies to write a letter to someone who could help Darfur informing them about this. I wrote to Oprah, saying:

Dear Oprah,
When you wake up every day, and you look at yourself in the mirror, do you know whom you represent? Do you represent yourself? Or maybe your family and friends? Or your lifestyle? Partially. But the majority of you is representing America. Now you’re probably saying, “What’s wrong with representing the USA?” Well take a good look around you. How economically held together we are. Then take a good look at Africa, specifically Darfur. As we bathe in our luxury and comfort, at this very second, someone in Darfur is afraid to go to sleep. Afraid to leave their house. Afraid they’re going to starve to death. Afraid that they will get raped, abused, bombed. And this brings me to my point: Why haven’t we helped out?
Miss Winfrey, there is only one logical answer to this: We are extremely greedy. We eat in excess until our stomachs cannot bear any more food. We use more water then necessary. We use only the best materials for our clothes, bedding, and houses. Meanwhile, we look at a place like Darfur. Food is scarce, water is limited, women are abused, people are being bombed, and life everyday is a challenge in itself. They look at life as one less day until your death. Now I ask you, Miss Winfrey, is this what we want? Is this what we, as Americans, would like to represent?
Now here is the reason I write to you, Oprah. We can change our ways. We can send supplies over to Darfur. We can help them out. We can beat this horrible genocide. We can put our foot down and say, “You know what? This whole genocide thing? Yeah, I’m not really cool with it. Never again.” And that is my goal. Those people out there have courage. They have hope and dreams of a new life; a fresh start. They, after all we have done, believe in us. And for the past few years, we’ve basically given them the cold shoulder; turned our backs on them. But there is one man I would like to give my thanks to, and that man is Brian Steidle. He is probably the first man to go to Darfur, take all the pictures that he has, come back to the USA, tell everyone, “Hey, this is what’s going on and we need to stop it.”
Not only did he get the cold shoulder, he got people telling him there was nothing wrong. And that man had the guts to go back to Darfur and help out. And let me inform you, when he landed that helicopter, the people of Darfur clapped. They didn’t clap because he was this famous guy who would autograph their little of clothes they had. They clapped because they thought that behind Brian were the military and the army and the navy. They thought the USA was finally helping. But all he had was his camera and a few essential things. And he felt guilty. But I think he isn’t the one that should feel guilty. It’s the rest of the world. Everyone, every single country, has turned their backs. They shut Darfur out. And there are children, Oprah. Children dying every day because they have been neglected. Once again I ask, but not to you; to the world. Is this what we want Darfur to see of us? There are ways to pitch in. We can bring food to their tables, and shelter above their heads. We can be the better example. We can save Darfur.
Go to www.savedarfur.com and click on “donate”. Donate money, supplies. Anything we can to pitch in. If possible, I can write a speech and send it in to you to say on your show. My point is we can make a difference. We just need to gather the right amount of voices to shout it with. We need to scream it as far as we can. We can spread the word that they need help.
My point is simple; my word is clear. In the words of Brian Steidle, “I don’t ever want to come to another meeting for genocide ever again.” I hope that those words can influence the population to change their thoughts on Darfur.
My name is Michelle, I am an 8th grader, and I am a believer.


Thank you for your time.


Sincerely,

Michelle (:

Sound good?

Sounds good...but America does sound a little like a fiend in the beginning of this letter. Shouldnt the genocide be represented as the fiend?

Carefull, SaveDarfur.com only accepts money donations...I beleive. You might want to double check that.

I would talk more about getting companies in America doing buisness with Sudan to pull out. I went to a rally last year that got one of these companies to stop. Look up and see if there is anything in your area you could attend and maybe add your personal experiences to this letter.

In the third paragraph you say "And that is my goal" I wound change that to "And this is my goal" or something else that would help state your position.

Be careful with being too repetative in the last two paragraphs. (My point is simple......my point is ect...)


I would address it as "Dear Oprah Winfrey"...not just Oprah to be a little more professional.
Its very well written! Great job.
 

Sounds good...but America does sound a little like a fiend in the beginning of this letter. Shouldnt the genocide be represented as the fiend? (1)

Carefull, SaveDarfur.com only accepts money donations...I beleive. You might want to double check that. (2)

I would talk more about getting companies in America doing buisness with Sudan to pull out. I went to a rally last year that got one of these companies to stop. Look up and see if there is anything in your area you could attend and maybe add your personal experiences to this letter.

In the third paragraph you say "And that is my goal" I wound change that to "And this is my goal" or something else that would help state your position.

Be careful with being too repetative in the last two paragraphs. (My point is simple......my point is ect...)


I would address it as "Dear Oprah Winfrey"...not just Oprah to be a little more professional.
Its very well written! Great job.

1: Oh, so we're the good guys for being bystanders? OK, this whole genocide thing started. Bad. But the fact that we let it go on, knowing that (the government) has a lot of money, and we didn't ever stop to help out? Worse.

2: I meant www.savedarfur.org . and anyways, it's an official site. It was at the end of a documentary.
 
1: Oh, so we're the good guys for being bystanders? OK, this whole genocide thing started. Bad. But the fact that we let it go on, knowing that (the government) has a lot of money, and we didn't ever stop to help out? Worse.

2: I meant www.savedarfur.org . and anyways, it's an official site. It was at the end of a documentary.

I agree with dot, and our gov doesn't have the money to save our own children. Until we can fix ourselves, we can't entirely be held responsible for not throwing the money that we don't have to another country.
 
I think dot was just trying to help >_<

Yes...I was! I thought I provided some constructive critisism. :confused3

1: Oh, so we're the good guys for being bystanders? OK, this whole genocide thing started. Bad. But the fact that we let it go on, knowing that (the government) has a lot of money, and we didn't ever stop to help out? Worse.

2: I meant www.savedarfur.org . and anyways, it's an official site. It was at the end of a documentary.

1: We are not letting this genocide go on. Our government, however, does NOT have a lot of money. Do you realize we are in our own war in the Middle East now?? Billions of American's dollers are being spent on that. The African government has also made it clear that they do not want to start a war...and are reluctent to accept help. However, we (Americans) are helping, heck I am helping. MANY American companies had already pulled out of doing their buisness with Sudan. Right now our focus is to get ALL companies pulled out. (From all countries doing buisness with Sudan) The Darfur Genocide can not keep going if it has no supplies.

2. I am WELL aware savedarfur is an official site. I dont think you understood my criticism, I will quote your sentance...
"We can save Darfur.
Go to www.savedarfur.com and click on “donate”. Donate money, supplies. Anything we can to pitch in."
I dont think they accept supplies. Here this is taken from the FAQs on their site...
Do you accept clothing and food donations?

We only accept monetary donations, as we do not provide on the ground humanitarian services.

Im sorry if you thought I was saying your letter was bad. I was just trying to provide critisism to improve it. Darfur is a very important cause to me.
 
(the government) has a lot of money

No, we don't. We are billions of dollars in debt. We can't even take care of ourselves.

Defense is costing a huge amount of money right now.

It might be selfish, but I've said it before and I'll say it again, let's take care of ourselves before we take care of others.
 
Forget it.

Pointless thread if I'm gonna get bashed at for mistakes and trying to help.

Mods close thread please.

>_<
 
Nobody is bashing you. We're all trying to provide advice. You asked for advice, we're giving you advice.

I'm so tired of people saying we're bashing them when we're only sharing our opinions.
 
Forget it.

Pointless thread if I'm gonna get bashed at for mistakes and trying to help.

Mods close thread please.

>_<
Who is bashing??? We are only giving advice. Even if this letter was already handed in (I dont know, I was giving advice as if it haden't been) you can still support this cause on your own. In order to support I beleive you need all your facts straight. Honestly I was giving you advice!

Nobody is bashing you. We're all trying to provide advice. You asked for advice, we're giving you advice.

I'm so tired of people saying we're bashing them when we're only sharing our opinions.

I completely agree 100%.
 
No one has bashed you, you just got upset when we disagreed.

I'm not a fan of oprah anyway. Shes so out of touch with the real world. She was freaked out that you could buy a bra at walmart for 10 dollars. I mean, HELLO, she grew up without money to buy food.Either she knew about walmart bras, she was just putting an act on for the camera, or she really has forgotten where she came from.
 
Good, but the United States is not a monster like you made us out to be.

:) I'm glad you care.

All a matter of opinion.

Anyway, good letter, but it seems that the world is getting way too swept up in the Help Darfur movement these days and not actually helping them at all. There are other causes that need this publicity, too.

What I hate is when the cool kids at school will wear like Darfur shirts and stuff but they don't really care about Darfur at all.
 


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