Help with Poem?

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  1. RedHeadedFairy

    RedHeadedFairy DIS Veteran

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    Okay Moms & Dads....

    I'm putting the last touches on everything for our rapidly approaching trip. DD8 has been working her tushie off to earn this trip & I wanted to really make it all as special as I can.

    I've gathered up tons of little disney souvenirs (like a new Tink hat, sparkly pink princess shoes, her favorite bubble gums, Tinkerbell pixie sticks, new earrings, etc..... I've been clearance shopping for MONTHS, lol.) and I've bagged it all up in a Princess bag along with a pre-printed kids journal so she can keep notes of her favorite things in each park.

    I want to pretend it's a reward 'gift' from her favorite characters & plan to sneak it into the room by running ahead of DH & DD & setting it up while they unload the car.

    I put together a poem by modifying one I found online but I'm struggling with the very last 2 lines... can anyone help me make this make sense?? :lmao: I've changed 'surprises' to 'gifts' to 'souvenirs' & no matter what I do I can't rhyme it together the way the rest of it flows... that last line is just there to have something there... I can change any of it so long as the 'gift' part gets expressed.

    I'm going to use images of her fave characters to decorate the page when I print it:


    Dear XXXXXXX,

    Welcome to Disney, we’re so glad you are here!
    We have all kinds of new things we can’t wait to share.
    There’s so much to do and so much to see
    And fun for all kids from age 1 to 93.
    From Main Street to the Castle, oh what fun!
    Rides and Parades and playing in the Sun.
    Mickey and Minnie and all their pals
    Alice and friends and the Princess Gals!
    Magic Mountains, roller-coasters and the famous Peter Pan,
    Tea Cups and Dumbo and Pirates of the Carribbean.
    When the day grows long and the sky grows dark
    It’s time for Fireworks before you leave the park!

    So kick back, relax and enjoy these surprises
    Our Gift to you, Princess, for just being YOU!



    HELP! LOL!
     
  2. CopperWife

    CopperWife Mouseketeer

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    How about..

    "Here is a bag and some fun trinkets, too
    Our gift to you, Princess, for just being You!"

    So, maybe that wording doesn't work for you, but you could always change the second-to-last line to be "Blah blah blah, too" to rhyme with "you" and you're gold! :thumbsup2

    Have a great trip!
     
  3. alc571

    alc571 DIS Veteran

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    Is this for working really hard at school? If so you could try something like:

    So enjoy these surprises, relax and kick back
    Our gift to you, Princess, for staying on track
     
  4. RedHeadedFairy

    RedHeadedFairy DIS Veteran

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    Yes! Either of your suggestions will work perfectly.... I was just overthinking it after looking at it for too long.

    And yes - it's a combo of working hard at school (All A Honor Roll last yr & this yr, starting & excelling in Gifted classes, etc), handling an increase in family duties/chores (we don't do allowances) and doing a lot of great citizenship stuff like working canned food drives, volunteering to help other students, family members, etc. She's also gone out of her way to earn her own spending money for souvenirs. :cheer2:

    THANK YOU!
     

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