"Ron jerked, trying to fight the pain. Her-Mio-NEE he called out.
You have no right to say her name, you filthy blood traitor. Avada Kedavra Draco hissed.
Rons body went limp. Ginny let out a little tear. You *******, you killed my brother!
Well, he deserved it Draco replied.
Why because he said Hermiones name Ginny hissed in reply.
Ginny, you know what your bloody lucky my mate Blaise has a crush on you otherwise you would be in the same position as your dear brother right now Draco informed her.
Blaise likes me? Ginny asked.
DUH Draco replied.
Ginnys face lit up with joy."
Who can tell me what is wrong with this sample?