Help, please. Job app related. Wording and such. (Anyone in HR?)

[leahannpen]

Everyone here is always so helpful, I was wondering if you could give me any suggestions on proper and clear ways to word something for a job application.

What I'm looking for are ways to get across assets for a job. This person has been at the same place for a long time, with no other jobs to use on the app. They have a space to write something... specifically asking for you to "put into detail any info that you feel may be of a qualifying nature or helpful to you in establishing your eligibility."

This is what we've got...not in any order really, so far.

Due to the lack of other jobs on this application, I'd like to let my longevity at my present job speak for itself. I believe my loyalty along with my strong work ethic would be an asset for this position. In my present job I've learned to handle many different situations in dealing with the public and know my organizational skills give me the ability to manage multipule projects and meet deadlines. I've also got strong communication and typing skills and am computer literate and have taken classes to further my skills in these areas.


Anything missing/sounding wrong or just plain out of place? I really appreciate any help or advice!!

 

[Maleficent13]

Ugh...I'm not in HR but I do all their work...currently hiring now, as a matter of fact. Anyway, I think what you have is fine, but I would leave out the line "Due to the lack of other jobs on this application" and just start with "My longevity at my present job speaks for itself". JMO, FWIW.

 

[snoopy]

I've been reading resumes all day today, but I'm willing to stop a minute and take a crack at yours. Here is how I think you should word that paragraph:

My loyalty and longevity in my current position, along with my strong work ethic would be an asset for this position. In my present job I've learned to handle many different situations while dealing with the public and my organizational skills give me the ability to manage multipule projects and meet deadlines. I have strong communication and typing skills, I'm computer literate and have taken classes to further my skills in these areas.

 

[jrydberg]

My edits:

"My longevity at my present job speaks for itself. I believe my strong sense of loyalty and ingrained work ethic make me an ideal candidate for this position. In my present job, I deal with the public in a variety of situations. My organizational skills give me the ability to manage multiple projects in a timely and efficient manner. My ability to communicate clearly and effectively, as well as my typing and computer skills, make me an excellent match for this position."

Bottom line, I'd try to emphasize any areas where skill sets match up well for the position. Be specific. Good luck.

 

[Christine]

Originally posted by jrydberg
My edits:

"My longevity at my present job speaks for itself. I believe my strong sense of loyalty and ingrained work ethic make me an ideal candidate for this position. In my present job, I deal with the public in a variety of situations. My organizational skills give me the ability to manage multiple projects in a timely and efficient manner. My ability to communicate clearly and effectively, as well as my typing and computer skills, make me an excellent match for this position."

Bottom line, I'd try to emphasize any areas where skill sets match up well for the position. Be specific. Good luck.

jrydberg,
Excellent grammar and punctuation. That was perfect.

leahannpenn,
Make sure whatever you use, pay attention to the sentence structure, grammar, etc. I was going to comment that it was *off* in your original post but I figured (hoped) that you were rushing since it was a message board post.

 

[jrydberg]

Thanks, do I get the job?

 

[Christine]

Originally posted by jrydberg
Thanks, do I get the job?

I would hire you!

 

[jrydberg]

Wooo! I'm virtually hired! Anyway, leahannpen, good luck with it

 

[leahannpen]

Christine, yes, it was "off" for sure... I knew what needed to be said, but I didn't know how to say it.

jrydberg, I'd hire ya! LOL... seriously, thanks so much to you and Snoopy!! Excellent! I wish I had your knack for grammar, but I do not. Thanks for your help and ideas. Just what I was looking for!




THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS!!!

 

[jrydberg]

Anytime. Glad to be of help