Essay help?

[imabrat]

I have to do an essay on international adoption for my child development class. Essays have never been my strong point, especially with opening them.
If you have any suggestions on what to add to my (weak, very weak) opening paragraph, it is greatly appreciated.

This is what I have so far.

Adoption is a life-changing decision. Adoption is also a length, costly process, and may not be right for everyone. There are two types of adoption, international and domestic. Domestic involves adopting a child from your home country, while international involves adopting from a wide variety of countries throughout the world.

What can I add or change to make this a stronger opening paragraph?
TIA!
Sonya.

 

[DisneyGirl625]

Im not too good at writing essays, but I can try and help.
For many people adoption is a life-changing decision. Adoptions are a lengthy and very costly process which may or may not be right for everyone. There are two types of adoptions that people can consider, international and domestic. International adoptions are when you adopt a child from a country other than your own , while domestic adoptions are when you adopt a child from your own country.

Hope this helps.

 

[Zip-A-Dee-Lady]

Adoption is a life changing, yet wonderful decision for anyone to make. However, with the lengthy and costly process involved in adoption, it may not be the right decision for everyone....

 

[arabians207]

Adoption is a life changing, yet wonderful decision for anyone to make. However, with the lengthy and costly process involved in adoption, it may not be the right decision for everyone....

I like this one the best.

 

[BandGeek911]

If I helped, you'd probably fail. Essays aren't my thing xD

 

[HSMndLKfan92]

Personally, I start off my first sentence with an attention grabber. Depending on the type of essay, it's normally a question. I'd start editing right away, but I don't know what kind of essay it is.

Persuasive?

 

[imabrat]

Personally, I start off my first sentence with an attention grabber. Depending on the type of essay, it's normally a question. I'd start editing right away, but I don't know what kind of essay it is.

Persuasive?

No, informative. I have to write about the international adoption process. I have everything, I just need help with the opening, and maybe the closing.

 

[Sparx]

your sentences are really short and choppy. try combining them to make it flow better.

 

[HouseMD1120]

Yay! I've been told that essays are a really strong point for me.

Definately combine some of your sentences. And at the end of your opening paragraph, address your main points. for instance, if you were going to talk about topic A, topic B, and topic C, mention those in your paragraph.