My Writing Project - First Chapter Finished

[ThePin Princess]

Heyy peoples.

Please help me out. I have to write a short 5 chapter book/story for my creative writing class. We picked genres out of a hat and I got romance and then we had to pick another one like sci-fi, historical fiction, fantasy, etc. and i got reality(i don't think thats a real one but still) and now i need help picking the eye color of my main charater, Allie's, love intrest his name is Jackson and i need his hair and eyes. His eyes are what draw Allie in the most, they have to be flamboyant, breath-taking and i need to be able to describe them. Allie and her best friend, Ashley, both have light brown hair. Allie has brown eyes, but a gorgeous brown and Ashley has blue-green eyes. Allie's other 'friend' Brett has shaggy medium brown hair and milk chocolate brown eyes. And Jackson doesn't have any yet but he has to be the definition of juinor high gorgeousness. Jackson is the new kid and his first day is the first day back from a month long winter vacation. Does anyone know any small town names somewhere where it snows, in the US? but any way Jackson's made one friend, the hockey team captain( i don't have a name for him yet but i think it will be Trevor or AJ but i have alot of A names). So can you help me pick the eye and hair color for Jackson. Please Please Please!!! Just tell me of your favorite color eyes and hair or what colors you think are most attractive thank you. oh Allie, her brother, and Jackson have pale skin. Ashley has a tanish skin but she is mostly pale, the sun gives her a glow, Ashley is beautiful with a breath-taking smile(at least in Allie's eyes).

TIA <3333
<3 the procrastinator <3

EDIT: i know i said juinor high up there but they are in 9th grade
EDIT 2: allie's eyes, as jackson describes them, are a million different shades of brown,yellow and orange and are different everytime he sees her.

 

[::Snow_White::]

My favorite eye color is green and hair is black.

Good luck!
This sounds like a cool idea.
I might mention it to my creative writing teacher!

 

[GoofysOnlyGirl]

Since it is creative writing, try making eyes that relate to his character. Instead of getting the most "perfect" eyes, try something to relate to him. Is he a bad boy, always getting in trouble, causing trouble, ect...give him dark eyes. Is he quiet, intelligent, romantic, try a deep blue. Is he friendly, outgoing, fun to be around, a light brown/hazel. You get what I am saying. As for hair same thing. Dark features, or light features. Make it realistic, there is no such thing as a perfect person, even in stories all characters have flaws.

 

[acesupercoolme]

For eyes...
Blue and deep like the ocean, the kind that just draws you in and that you could stare into forever.
I like dark brown hair, but not dark enough to look black.

 

[imabrat]

On a guy, the most attractive to me is jet black hair with gorgeous, breathtaking, cerulean blue eyes.

 

[Axel]

So, I can't really describe them, but the most attractive pair of eyes (short of my crush's baby blues) are these:

I'm totally drawn in by them.

And black hair.

 

[DramaGirl]

I absolutely love gray eyes.

 

[am.lin]

brown with haze around it

 

[BabyPiglet]

What kind of character is he? If he is mysterious, I would do with deep brown eyes. If he's friendly, I'd say ocean blue.

Hair color should work with the eyes.

 

[ThePin Princess]

Since it is creative writing, try making eyes that relate to his character. Instead of getting the most "perfect" eyes, try something to relate to him. Is he a bad boy, always getting in trouble, causing trouble, ect...give him dark eyes. Is he quiet, intelligent, romantic, try a deep blue. Is he friendly, outgoing, fun to be around, a light brown/hazel. You get what I am saying. As for hair same thing. Dark features, or light features. Make it realistic, there is no such thing as a perfect person, even in stories all characters have flaws.

thank you. you make a very good point, but i know should probably give a background on the characters to get better apperances.

Allie and Ashley - Little sisters of the two hottest, Varsity hockey team captains. Popular in their small grade of 89 people, now 90.

School/Town - Small School. Public School. Small, Rich Town. Families take lavish vacations. Allie and Ashley just got back from Miami. Their brothers, Cam, AJ and Andrew(Ashley's family is the all A's), got back from Switzerland.

Allie - The youngest of the well known Greene family, Hawks JV volleyball Captain and Liebro, 5' 5", light brown hair, beautiful brown eyes. She only had one relationship, with Brett, over the summer. He broke her heart for a girl he met in Laugna Beach on his family vacation their. When he came back he begged for her and still makes her feel bad about it. She is outgoing, pretty, a reader, intellegent, athletic, energetic, outspoken. Best friends with Ashley Robbs. Allie, aka Al, has a great future as an actress. She can't lie if her life depended on it because the lies eat at her inside(idk where that came from but my friends say that alot about their sisters). Since her broken heart she has said no to every boy that asks her out or to hang out. She skipped 2nd grade. Birthday Feb. 5th 1995. She meets Jackson tradjectly(how do you spell that?). He saved her life. And she is now in love with him. I haven't past there yet. OH yea she shares my discust of blood.

Jackson - New kid. I myself, the author, don't know much about him. He just came to me while i was day dreaming in Science today( no i do not just not listen in Science i finish my test early, 20 minutes early, and i had nothing to do and i did the homework the night before.) but he looked like my ex so i had to change him a little. In my vision/daydream he had a dark brown hair, it was medium length, i couldnt see his eyes because in my vision i wasn't allie, and Allie and Trevor are the only two who have really seen his eyes but then i was allie when she wakes up from her black out, wearing what i think is Jackson sweatshirt and there is no Jackson. But for the most part, he is sport, nice, good grades, smart, comes from a proper family, has 2 brothers and 3 sisters.
And that is all i know about him.

But atleast to Allie he is flawless, well, so far he is but its only chapter one, she still doesn't know who he is.

Ashley, Brett and Trevor later. Then Andrew, AJ, and Cam.

 

[ThePin Princess]

Okay I decide he is a blue eyes guy, whats the prettiest shade of blue/ the most attractive shade??

 

[Cinderelli16]

I think light blue with silver is gorgeous. lol
Yes I said silver. hahah
My friends little brother has light blue eyes with a little bit of silver around his pupils and I find it so pretty. lol

 

[I Am What I Am]

Okay I decide he is a blue eyes guy, whats the prettiest shade of blue/ the most attractive shade??

Whatever Zac Efron's is

 

[KitKat_Tink]

I like the either light light blue or Deep ocean blue...

 

[imabrat]

I prefer a light blue, but not enough to border green. I also like it when their eyes turn dark when he gets mad. I know someone, when he gets mad, his eyes turn this dark blue. It almost looks like an ocean during a bad storm.

 

[ThePin Princess]

I think light blue with silver is gorgeous. lol
Yes I said silver. hahah
My friends little brother has light blue eyes with a little bit of silver around his pupils and I find it so pretty. lol

Oh my lordyy. that sounds so pretty. I just daydreamed with those eyes and now he is absolutely gorgeous! you're a life saver.

 

[ThePin Princess]

I prefer a light blue, but not enough to border green. I also like it when their eyes turn dark when he gets mad. I know someone, when he gets mad, his eyes turn this dark blue. It almost looks like an ocean during a bad storm.

That is such a good idea!

Jackson offically has - light light (bahama water) blue eyes with a little silver around the pupil. And when he is mad they turn dark blue.

 

[DisGirlAllie]

Heyy peoples.

Please help me out. I have to write a short 5 chapter book/story for my creative writing class. We picked genres out of a hat and I got romance and then we had to pick another one like sci-fi, historical fiction, fantasy, etc. and i got reality(i don't think thats a real one but still) and now i need help picking the eye color of my main charater, Allie's, love intrest his name is Jackson and i need his hair and eyes. His eyes are what draw Allie in the most, they have to be flamboyant, breath-taking and i need to be able to describe them. Allie and her best friend, Ashley, both have light brown hair. Allie has brown eyes, but a gorgeous brown and Ashley has blue-green eyes. Allie's other 'friend' Brett has shaggy medium brown hair and milk chocolate brown eyes. And Jackson doesn't have any yet but he has to be the definition of juinor high gorgeousness. Jackson is the new kid and his first day is the first day back from a month long winter vacation. Does anyone know any small town names somewhere where it snows, in the US? but any way Jackson's made one friend, the hockey team captain( i don't have a name for him yet but i think it will be Trevor or AJ but i have alot of A names). So can you help me pick the eye and hair color for Jackson. Please Please Please!!! Just tell me of your favorite color eyes and hair or what colors you think are most attractive thank you. oh Allie, her brother, and Jackson have pale skin. Ashley has a tanish skin but she is mostly pale, the sun gives her a glow, Ashley is beautiful with a breath-taking smile(at least in Allie's eyes).

TIA <3333
<3 the procrastinator <3

EDIT: i know i said juinor high up there but they are in 9th grade

ALLIE!
Sorry, I just get a thrill whenever someone uses my name for something and spells it the way I do.
Anyway, my favorite color eye and hair combination is black hair with green eyes. Or violet eyes. That's what I generally use when I write stuff. Or I'll use curly blonde hair.
Hope this helps.

 

[ThePin Princess]

ALLIE!
Sorry, I just get a thrill whenever someone uses my name for something and spells it the way I do.
Anyway, my favorite color eye and hair combination is black hair with green eyes. Or violet eyes. That's what I generally use when I write stuff. Or I'll use curly blonde hair.
Hope this helps.

Lol I love the name Allie but something about ' ie ' at the end of names is so much cooler than why, except with ' ily ' like my friends daily and emily!

 

[BabyPiglet]

My favourite shade of blue for eyes is a really really pale blue.